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Shipwrecked

Carly

12 comments

June 15, 2018

On the shores of a mediocre life
Swimming in a ruptured love
Cursed with believing in goodness
I was made for love
But I am drowning with a white flag

The reefs bruise my heels
The starfish hurt my head
I am sinking to the bottom
I am shipwrecked

I prayed the night before
I made promises to Him
That I would stay close to the shore
But that didn’t happen

Nothing is happening around me
Cover me like the sand around me
I want to live but some days it’s so hard
Give me a big hug, slippery octopus
Take away these turbulent waves in me

I know this poem is a little dark but what do you think? Is there a certain line that stood out to you?

 

 

 

12 thoughts on “Shipwrecked”

  1. Sant Kirpal Singh: "Be Good Do Good And Be One"'s avatar Didis Art Design says:
    June 15, 2018 at 12:56 pm

    Dear Carly

    Try to direct your thoughts to positive things, be a rock in a stormy sea, when waves are clashing against it. As long as you focus on the bright side of life, on Jesus Christ, God, darkness cannot touch you.

    Wishing you strength and light in your heart
    Hugs Didi

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    1. Carly's avatar Carly (message in stanza) says:
      June 16, 2018 at 10:45 pm

      Thank you, Didi. But we all go through times and seasons of disbelief and pain. Even David of the Bible did when cried out to God, “Have mercy on me, Lord, for I am faint; heal me, Lord, for my bones are in agony. My soul is in deep anguish. How long, Lord, how long?” Thank for your concern, friend. Most of my poetry is positive but I think it’s healthy to have dark poetry every now and then. 🙂

      Sincerely,

      Carly

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      1. Sant Kirpal Singh: "Be Good Do Good And Be One"'s avatar Didis Art Design says:
        June 17, 2018 at 5:25 am

        Dear Carly
        Sure, in all of us, in our mind, there are positive and negative things. Some come up like bubbles and disappear again, others return and colour us with its content. The more we fix our attention in God the more we are blessed and slowly slowly doubts and negative thoughts disappear and turn into a strong faith in God. When going down to the bottom why we our mind is jumping towards this or that direction, then it is even possible to find the reason. In this connection it is good to observe our mind, to control it and allow only positive which are God oriented to come up. Otherwise negative feelings and thoughts are able to poison us, to hold us into its clutches. All of course is a matter of experience and how strongly we digest those things having influence on us.
        Thank you, dear Carly 🤗

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      2. Carly's avatar Carly (message in stanza) says:
        June 18, 2018 at 3:36 am

        Thanks for sharing your personal thoughts with me, Didi. I really appreciate it. 🙂 You have a good point.

        Sincerely,

        Carly 🙂

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      3. Sant Kirpal Singh: "Be Good Do Good And Be One"'s avatar Didis Art Design says:
        June 18, 2018 at 3:54 am

        Thanks, dear Carly 🙂
        Warm greetings
        Didi

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      4. Carly's avatar Carly (message in stanza) says:
        June 19, 2018 at 2:13 pm

        😀

        Like

  2. Following Him's avatar Following Him says:
    June 18, 2018 at 1:44 pm

    Wow! ❤ This part impacted me the most:
    "I prayed the night before
    I made promises to Him
    That I would stay close to the shore
    But that didn’t happen…"
    Oh, how many times I have made promises that I couldn't keep.

    I really enjoyed this, even if it was a little darker than you usually write. 🙂 (But I write them too occasionally, so I identify with it.)

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    1. Carly's avatar Carly (message in stanza) says:
      June 19, 2018 at 2:12 pm

      I am happy it touched you. We all fall short of the mark with God sometimes, right? And I express my dark emotions through poetry sometimes. ❤️❤️

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      1. Following Him's avatar Following Him says:
        June 22, 2018 at 2:14 pm

        🙂

        Yeah, we do, just like Romans 3:23 says. 😊

        Me too. 🙂 Most of them haven’t been posted on my blog, but I did post this one a couple of years ago: https://followinghimbesidestillwaters.wordpress.com/2016/12/02/when-faith-is-tested/ The first draft ended at, “I took risks, I dared to hope; I believed.” So you can get an idea of where my heart was at that time, haha.

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      2. Carly's avatar Carly (message in stanza) says:
        June 25, 2018 at 5:02 am

        I understand. Is it ok for me to publish my dark poetry? Do you think people are interested in that kind of poetry?

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      3. Following Him's avatar Following Him says:
        June 25, 2018 at 2:12 pm

        🙂 I think it’s fine to share those! I haven’t shared many of mine because they are much more personal and I’m not sure if I’m ready to expose that part of myself on my blog yet. 😊 I know that I am interested in that kind of poetry; I’m sure others are too. 🙂

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      4. Carly's avatar Carly (message in stanza) says:
        June 26, 2018 at 4:29 pm

        I completely understand, Grace! ❤️

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